Poem 2, Tempest of the Mind
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, Jan 30 2009 11:21 AM
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Posted 30 January 2009 - 11:21 AM
The requirement for our second poem is that it can't have any end-stopped lines. Basically, no lines (aside from the last one, hopefully) can end anywhere that a pause would seem natural, such as the end of a sentence. Again, this isn't due to be turned in until Monday, so there's plenty of time to modify it before then. I'm posting this one as a picture since it loses some effect if I can't space the lines the way I want. Criticism is welcome and expected. Enjoy.
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Posted 30 January 2009 - 02:06 PM
/me didn't actually read it, but I did notice the tornado shape. Fancy.
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Posted 30 January 2009 - 06:12 PM
Therese likes what you did with the shape~!
And it might be better if you varied the line lengths more than the spacing to create the shape...
It's good though! Don't be so picky, Alllllice~
I'm just trying to help him~ But how's the rhythm with that? ♩♪ ♫ ♬!
It seems like it might be kinda random, but yay anyway~!
But that's bad...
Whaaaat do you know anyway? You're not a poet!
Alice would make a better poet than Therese~
Therese makes better pies!
Alice makes better cookies!
Therese makes better cakes!
No, Alice makes better cakes!
Therese!
Alice!
Hmph! Hmph!
And it might be better if you varied the line lengths more than the spacing to create the shape...
It's good though! Don't be so picky, Alllllice~
I'm just trying to help him~ But how's the rhythm with that? ♩♪ ♫ ♬!
It seems like it might be kinda random, but yay anyway~!
But that's bad...
Whaaaat do you know anyway? You're not a poet!
Alice would make a better poet than Therese~
Therese makes better pies!
Alice makes better cookies!
Therese makes better cakes!
No, Alice makes better cakes!
Therese!
Alice!
Hmph! Hmph!
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Posted 30 January 2009 - 07:20 PM
The shape was actually harder than I expected since I had trouble getting the lines the right length without using any end stops. It was fun though, pushing the lines around and breaking up sentences to make a picture, such as it is. And yeah, I didn't even bother attempting to stick with any sort of rhythm; it is a storm after all. ^_^
I was originally going to do a poem about writer's block, but I realized that more often my problem isn't that I have no ideas, but rather too many (one of the reasons I've never finished making a game =p ).
Also, I'm pretty sure I make the best cakes. Thanks for the comments though.
I was originally going to do a poem about writer's block, but I realized that more often my problem isn't that I have no ideas, but rather too many (one of the reasons I've never finished making a game =p ).
Also, I'm pretty sure I make the best cakes. Thanks for the comments though.
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Posted 30 January 2009 - 07:57 PM
Nu-uh!
Alice and Therese make the bestest bestest bestest cakes and they're bester than yours!
Yeah! In fact, we could take your cake, and turn it into a super-duper cake that's twenty hundred thousand million billion lapillion times better!!!
Alice and Therese make the bestest bestest bestest cakes and they're bester than yours!
Yeah! In fact, we could take your cake, and turn it into a super-duper cake that's twenty hundred thousand million billion lapillion times better!!!
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